I enjoyed this, although I think you could have changed up the main melody at least once - although you did switch up its overall sound via envelopes. I enjoyed the high frequency white noise around the end as well, sounds like a good transition into another song or something. Seeing as this is a new version, I'll also have to check out the original song. Keep it up.
hey thank you man! I'm glad you enjoyed it! I know this version is a little repetitive but I'm thinking about throwing some vocals in there too!
Change the piano
Your choice of pad was a solid one - I can't say the same for the piano though, try adding a bit more attack to it - or change the sample entirely, as it stands right now you have a very airy/soft pad with a very punctual/sharp piano - try changing the sample, hell even a synth might get the job done.
No offense or anything, this track just isn't doing it for me. Don't get me wrong though, you clearly know what you're doing. The basis of your drum beats are solid, but the song seems almost too subtle in some cases - if that's your intention then ignore my stupid ass and go right ahead - but it seems like the song lacks the substance I'm accustomed to hearing... and yet it seems like there is something there - perhaps try altering the bass a little....
Just the same this song does resemble its name in a good way...
Yes, I hear ya! I know somethings missing, just cant find it quite yet. Still working on the track.
Hated the opening, but the rest has some potential for a videogame tutorial or something... Laid back, cute and japanese are the only words i could use to describe this... :P
A few small things
That one synth you have echoing/panning in the background doesn't sit too well with me it might be a bit off key or something? I dont want to be a dick and pick a part your work or anything, im just trying to offer some constructive criticism :)
You may want to lessen up on the attack of the lead synth (or the one thats there from the beginning, the bass is fine.)
Your drums are fine by the way.
You're not being a dick at all. I appreciate criticism, usually when it's constructive. This track was actually more or less a throwaway; it was just another variation of my previous loop. Thanks for the advice, man - I appreciate, and will probably buff out those errors.
- ~ K o i r u - k u n ~ -
The one thing you might want to tone down slightly is the delay on the lead synth you're using. Otherwise I think this loop captures the feel of a videogame sky level rather nicely.
Thanks for the review, MrTranquility, and I may fix that in the near future, given that's one of the more prevalent problems of the song.
A solid loop
Well you got it down pretty much to a key, this is exactly what I was expecting when I read the words "character select".
I might suggest changing the lead synths around a bit for the sake of experimentation, but those are just my two cents really.
Grazie! Thanks for the review, Tranquility. I'll keep that in mind, so, thank you! Hopefully the game will come to fruition soon.
Reminds me of 80's synth pop, along the lines of depeche mode I might suggest you find a vocalist for this as well. I've tried making something along the lines of this when I first started using Fruity Loops and it was pretty tough, but I think you've pulled off the overall feel rather nicely.
I like it. :)
Yeah I have lyrics. I tried singing them myself. Unfortunately it gave people severe brain tumors.
So yes finding a singer would be an excelent idea.
Im not sure...
Sounds like you used VST's n dum samples to make this - while thats not inherently bad it took away from the overall feel of the song. It would be great to hear this with actual instruments, the composition didn't sound half bad. I've listened to some heavy metal in my time, but I dont think I can weigh in on this one as much as I'd like to - it sounds pretty solid though.
If anything change that snare/tom it aint helping.
I wish I could play guitar for real, but sadly I can't. I do agree that the drum samples are kind of lame. Later on I plan on getting something better but for right now, I'm doing as good as I can with what I have. Thanks for the review. It was very helpful.
I'm not huge on happy/dance
But this is nice, it reminds me of lemonade. Yeah...
Have a nice day now. I'd give you a more constructive review, but I dont have much constructive criticism other than this should be a bit longer.
Sounds like you have potential so do it up y'hear?
Yep, this is a remix, so I don't have much control over the melodies or progression, these are determined by the original song.
Well, I usually don't make songs that are this happy. Most of 'em are more sad or something.
Make it longer? Perhaps. But not now, I kind of lack the time.
Anyway, thanks for reviewing this.
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