Here's what I think...
+The art style wasn't half bad, nothing I can really complain about.
+The idea was a solid one, creepy premise and everything.
- The narration was rather weak, in both tone and delivery. The narrator was reading with a rhyming scheme when no rhyming words were present. This seems to be more along the lines of free-verse and not rhyme poetry (if its even poetry.)
- You need a better voice actor/ your voice actor needs more practice
"I don't understand how you can attempt involuntary manslaughter."
"I don't understand how you can fail at indecent exposure."
This was a great teaser. If you're entire web-series is anything like this you'll have me as a fan for sure. There's not much constructive criticism I can offer you because I enjoyed this submission thoroughly, but for the sake of trying to find something wrong with this so that you might improve upon your work...
Damn I got nothing at the moment...
This made my day.
It's sad but very true that people like this exist.
You've succeeded in making me cry I was laughing so hard at this. The sheer shock value is what did it for me.
You guys get bonus points for the mischief makers piece at the end. Excellent work, all of you.
I like it, but...
I think it needed an actual ending, it just kind of cut out at the end while i was hoping for some kind of one liner or something.
All in all its fairly good social commentary, and I laughed here and there.
Yeah I thought as much
These are absolutely hilarious!
I'm loving your humor, although the characters seem inspired of Cyanide and Happiness - I think they're a good homage to that series either way.
Great job and keep up the good work.
"You're a dick willy."
This is the first episode I've seen of your series, but I'll definitely check out the others if they're anywhere near as good as this was.
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